tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-24675970.post116205194498265017..comments2023-08-20T04:50:13.424-07:00Comments on Progress Report: Redraft of redraftthe teenshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03715799204792667828noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-24675970.post-1162677950642553912006-11-04T14:05:00.000-08:002006-11-04T14:05:00.000-08:00Sorry - I just caught up with this comment as they...Sorry - I just caught up with this comment as they don't come to my email!<BR/>I don't know why I typed "with the women" ...<BR/>I meant that it's interesting when a male writer successfully gets into the head of a female character. and likewise, here is a non-musician (as far as we know) talking about music - so does he convince you? Or do you feel it's not really music as you understand it?<BR/><BR/>If you "show how the author succeeds .." at anything, you bring out the points where he is actually doing something which makes it special, convincing you that this is really happening or whatever. So you quote words, phrases - or look at what he *doesn't * say , what he leaves out, what he suggests. We're talking specific words here, and technique - the real stuff of writing. And remember, BM's big thing is to *show*, not just to *tell* - it's a point he keeps making about successful writing.Christine McIntoshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14198224025775398453noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-24675970.post-1162124292237971352006-10-29T04:18:00.000-08:002006-10-29T04:18:00.000-08:00So what would I make the question be? "Show how su...So what would I make the question be? "Show how successful the author is in showing you that...?" Sorry I don't really understand what you mean by "both the music and with women are real". I am relieved about the embedding of quotes though!<BR/><BR/>SSthe teenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03715799204792667828noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-24675970.post-1162076934899765942006-10-28T16:08:00.000-07:002006-10-28T16:08:00.000-07:00Good - you're getting there.Incidentally, you seem...Good - you're getting there.<BR/><BR/>Incidentally, you seem to me to be embedding your quotes with a fair degree of skill, so I'm not worried on that score.<BR/><BR/>On the subject of "Grace Notes": a former student of mine merely set out to show how the author convinced her that both the music and with women are real. She related it to the male domintaion of the musical world in the setting of the story. It wasn't a hugely successful RPR, but it could have been!Christine McIntoshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14198224025775398453noreply@blogger.com